“How a Remote Peak in Myanmar Nearly Broke an Elite Team of Climbers” by Mark Jenkins

The article I chose to dissect is from National Geographic, about a recent expedition to a remote mountain in South East Asia called Hkakabo Razi undertaken by writer Mark Jenkins.


Hyperlinks:

These hyperlinks send interactors to websites that give more detailed information about the subjects inside the article that the average person would not know if they were not mountaineers like Jenkins. The hyperlinks give context to the individuals and places in the story, especially the news article links.

All hyperlinks would open in a new tab, because the reader would want to continue to read the article from where they left off after they gathered the information they needed.


It is difficult to separate this article cleanly because it is a work of creative nonfiction, and so has a purposeful narrative that the author has crafted.

However, it would become more digitally accessible to separate the background research and history of the expedition from the actual expedition within the story.

Subdivisions:

  • Narrative of the expedition
  • Research, history of Hkakabo Razi
    • list of previous failed expeditions to Hkakabo Razi
    • Jenkins’ personal reasons for wanting to climb Hkakabo Razi
  • Important persons page
    • fellow climbers
    • his late teammates
    • famous explorers

Pull-outs:

  • How to Plan an Expedition
    • Create a small excerpt in the empty space on the sides of the article briefly explaining how professional mountaineers prepare for expeditions
  • How to Cook a Meal on a Mountain
    • Another small excerpt on what foods to eat in the wild or to bring with you, and how to cook them with limited supplies
  • Personal entry on Why People Climb Mountains
    • Take section on “Mountaineers are egoists” and explain more fully

Ways to Improve Content:

  • Create a map following the expedition with dates and names
    • The article doesn’t use many dates when describing the actual expedition, just time descriptors (“two weeks” and “three days”); get more specific about the expedition with a visual aid
    • Possibly integrate the photos in the gallery with the locations they were taken in on the map; with each location on the map, an interactor could hover or click on a pin that brought up the corresponding photo with text detailing what was going on there.
  • Move the links to the photo gallery and the short film to a more noticeable location or make them more attention grabbing
  • Create a timeline to make the narrative more cohesive with all of the extra information
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